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HEL


Ungrounded, floating on the whispers of a memory,
Secretly kindling the tantrums of one’s victory.
Faint yet chaotic render of pure rage tapping, striking,
A symphony of fire, a sonata of the land burning.

Hel is thy mistress, ruling the maddening underworld,
Leisure in your rotting vessel, a ritual for the undefeated Gods.
Hel, gazing upon your flesh, your tormented world.
Calling upon thy reclining faith from a river following the odds.

Yet still ungrounded, still balancing on the edge of a ripping tapestry.
An emblazing relic digging in your palm, between blood and atrophy,
Runic treasures and charms hidden under your broken armor,
Hailing her Cimmerian name, at last lifting the valiant Hammer.
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XomegaXX Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
huh. 
This actually almost perfectly translates into the epic poetry format the Norse used to immortalize their pantheon. 
Also, no one remembers poor Hel, doomed to die forever.

Your meter is wonderful. Your rhyming is scintillating.
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you very much, very happy it pleases you!
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JohnHorrordude Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
Wonderful!!
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Professional General Artist
thanks :)
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IX-Ansasi Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student General Artist
love how you make the words flow and connect, its easy to move with the words from the first to the last, beginning and end. To use imagery and concepts from Asatru to express yourself so fluently makes this poem stand out for me, well done.
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you very much
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GimmsAlternative Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good God! This is the most AMAZING poetry I've ever read, and I've read Shel Silverstein. O_O Such amazing analogies and descriptions, and very far in depth with the vocabulary, this poem stands out more than I thought possible! I also love the sense of duality used! :D PERFECT! :D :D :D 
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much, really!
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GimmsAlternative Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :) I have a question. I, being a poet myself, have been awe-struck by your talents and have spawned an idea; I was wondering if maybe you could help me with something. I've had this concept lurking in the back of my mind for quite some time now, but have yet to find the right person to include until now. I write free verse poems, but because that is the only way I can usually. See, I write off the top of my head; I think of one line, and just bounce whatever sounds good off of that. I do not COMPLETELY write out of random, I do keep to a topic. Anyway, on to the question: Would you be willing to write half of a poem and allow me to write the second half, then another vice versa? I will not exclude your credit in the writing, because you'll probably write the better half anyway. :P I just want to test my ability to throw myself into a topic I know nothing about and continue with it, and maybe you could test this as well, IF you want- It's up to you. :) (Sorry for the paragraph)
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thats a great I idea, unfortunately I don't have enough time in my schedule to permit me to do it :S
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GimmsAlternative Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, well, that's alright. :) Thanks anyway. ^_^
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chorisschema Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
My goodness, this is very good!
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you very much
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Chezzmaster Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Writer
"Hel is thy mistress" - goddamn. I thought I was single :P
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Sparr0ww Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student Writer
I like it. It reads like you weren't too tied down by having such a rhyming scheme (it's why I usually do without one =P )
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you
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Sparr0ww Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student Writer
You are quite welcome :)
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Breandan Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
Are you saying Loki's daughter gets her hands on Mjolnir?

You cosplay, LARP, and now you write? If you play chess or guitar I don't want to know, I don't think I can take it: how are you real :P
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
I do play chess from time to time...but I suck. And I dont play guitar, but I play bass :P
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Breandan Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
Close enough!
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Zoomy333 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
Ever considered a career in death metal? Because all this needs is some blast beats and a couple of guitars and you've got a brutal as hell song.
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
hahaha well thanks :P
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madigarzhull Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant, I got chills. 
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you!
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Gunmetalblack Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Awesome! Very powerful imagery in this. :) Very well done!
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you
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Gunmetalblack Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
You're welcome!
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grassa48 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beauty, brains, talented actress and poet; you are the complete package.
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
aww thank you
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godhi Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional Writer
Excellent use of rhyme, rhythm, and meter. I love your description of Hel and her realm, especially since as a Norse Heathen she is one of my patron goddesses. A beautiful poem, and proof once again that you are an artist of many talents!
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you very very much!
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Crimsonight Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student Digital Artist
This is one of those poems where you pick up something different every time you read it. I really love the metaphors and symbolism. Excellent work. Keep writing B-)
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you very much
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HelzimGiger Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Is the narrator addressing a warrior that turned away from the Aesir?

It's well written, I see you chose the common depiction that Helheimr is a miserable realm.

I see in a comment above it was inspired by a LARP character, what LARP and who is your character?
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
Exactly and thank you. It's for Terres Imperiales in Quebec :) I play a Norse character named Helissa but I cant reveal much about it just in case :P
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DeviantRavnos Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Very nice Norse god story!
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
:) thank you......inspired from my character when I larp XD
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DeviantRavnos Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Nice! I'am a huge fan of RPG to :D
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
:)
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Rammsteinfan1994 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
Cool
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
:)
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Rammsteinfan1994 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
:)
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FightingIrish17 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Very striking. Paints a marvelous image. Beating Heart - Black  You are indeed a woman after my own heart. :P
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
thank you :)
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FightingIrish17 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
no no, thank You. it's nice knowing there are others like myself in the world ;) haha
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
hehe :)
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cwaynefurlough Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are far better at writing than I. :p
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
haha well thanks
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cwaynefurlough Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome. Keep it going.
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Stephanie-van-Rijn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
:) I will
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